Week 11 Story: The Other Side
Once in an ancient land there was a man that was part of a tribe. One day he decided to leave the tribe in search of a wife for himself. He left in the early part of the day so that he wouldn't be seen by the other tribe members because they would always make fun of him for not having a wife. He had one friend in the tribe and told him that he was leaving so that someone knew if he didn't come back in time then something had happened to him.
The man started on his journey to find his partner and went west. He started up the mountain to try and pass it because he had never been on the other side of the mountain. The tribe he was part of told many stories about how the other side of the mountain had a lot of mystical creatures and was a very dangerous place. The man didn't ever take these stories serious but now as he was making his journey he was worried it might all be true.
As soon as he past the mountain he felt a cold breeze which sent chills all across his body. He felt like he was in danger and was on guard. Eventually he heard some strange noises coming from the forest so he tried to avoid that area. Later on he became very curious and decided to investigate. When he went to go see he was hiding behind trees and saw a humongous dog. He became scared and started to walk away but as soon as he did he made a noice by accident which made the dog turn around. The dog smelt him and started chasing him down and cornered him on the side of the mountain. The dog attacked the man and ripped his leg off. The man then crawled behind some rocks so the dog could not reach him.
A few days later after the man, the man's friend became very worried about what had happened. He decided to go out and look for his friend. When he went up to the mountain he saw his friends tracks and followed them. Eventually he came to the place where his friend started running and saw an animals tracks next to his friends. He decided to go back and tell the tribe his discovery so they could all decide what should be done.
The tribe decided that they should go and search for the man and follow the tracks. They also brought many dogs just incase they had to face the animal as well. They started their journey and followed the tracks until the dead end. They saw a lot of blood and a bone on the ground stripped clean of the meat. Then they heard cries coming from behind the rocks and pulled the man out. The tribe then took the man back to the village and healed him up. They all decided that no one should ever go back on the other side of the mountain ever again.
Author's Note: One of the stories I read about was about a huge dog which would help a human hunt. The dog was very well trained in the beginning but started to become more aggressive when it grew older. Eventually the dog became aggressive with other humans as well and would attack them. The dog would often disappear for a while and come back with bones in it's mouth. The owner later found out that the dog was going to neighboring villages and would attack people there and bit their legs off. In this story I decided to make the dog attack a random man while it was out hunting for the human. I didn't want to put the owner in the story as well because it would create a conflict between what the owner should do with the man. Instead of taking the dog taking the leg this time he just ate the meat and left the bone there. I did that so the tribe could find it and be worried about what thing could have done that to the man. I wanted to add a bit of mystery between the tribe and the dog by having them not see him but just see what he was capable of.
The Giant Dog
The man started on his journey to find his partner and went west. He started up the mountain to try and pass it because he had never been on the other side of the mountain. The tribe he was part of told many stories about how the other side of the mountain had a lot of mystical creatures and was a very dangerous place. The man didn't ever take these stories serious but now as he was making his journey he was worried it might all be true.
As soon as he past the mountain he felt a cold breeze which sent chills all across his body. He felt like he was in danger and was on guard. Eventually he heard some strange noises coming from the forest so he tried to avoid that area. Later on he became very curious and decided to investigate. When he went to go see he was hiding behind trees and saw a humongous dog. He became scared and started to walk away but as soon as he did he made a noice by accident which made the dog turn around. The dog smelt him and started chasing him down and cornered him on the side of the mountain. The dog attacked the man and ripped his leg off. The man then crawled behind some rocks so the dog could not reach him.
A few days later after the man, the man's friend became very worried about what had happened. He decided to go out and look for his friend. When he went up to the mountain he saw his friends tracks and followed them. Eventually he came to the place where his friend started running and saw an animals tracks next to his friends. He decided to go back and tell the tribe his discovery so they could all decide what should be done.
The tribe decided that they should go and search for the man and follow the tracks. They also brought many dogs just incase they had to face the animal as well. They started their journey and followed the tracks until the dead end. They saw a lot of blood and a bone on the ground stripped clean of the meat. Then they heard cries coming from behind the rocks and pulled the man out. The tribe then took the man back to the village and healed him up. They all decided that no one should ever go back on the other side of the mountain ever again.
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Author's Note: One of the stories I read about was about a huge dog which would help a human hunt. The dog was very well trained in the beginning but started to become more aggressive when it grew older. Eventually the dog became aggressive with other humans as well and would attack them. The dog would often disappear for a while and come back with bones in it's mouth. The owner later found out that the dog was going to neighboring villages and would attack people there and bit their legs off. In this story I decided to make the dog attack a random man while it was out hunting for the human. I didn't want to put the owner in the story as well because it would create a conflict between what the owner should do with the man. Instead of taking the dog taking the leg this time he just ate the meat and left the bone there. I did that so the tribe could find it and be worried about what thing could have done that to the man. I wanted to add a bit of mystery between the tribe and the dog by having them not see him but just see what he was capable of.
The Giant Dog
Hell Mohammed, I thought your story was a very good story. I thought your details in the story were very good like when the tribe was searching for the man and they found all the blood and bone on the ground. I thought your story also flowed really well throughout. Overall the story was really great, keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHey Mohammed, I like that you decided to flip the story and focus on the victim instead of the dog. My advise for this story would be to read through your sentences and see if you can find some transition words that will help your flow. Another thing that you can do in try to include different kinds of sentences such as compound and complex. This will make your story sound a little more natural.
ReplyDeleteHi Mohammed! I thought you did a very good job with this story. You provided well thought out descriptions for everything, and really put a good image in the reader's head. It was really creative and I found it to be very entertaining. Nice work! I hope I can read some more soon!
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